Posted by: rr | November 23, 2006

dahlia

The morning chill has defeated the purpose of my yellow sweater, I haven’t even broken a sweat. I was trying to jog but the cool breeze slowed me down, and the scenery took me to a stroll. To my left were endless rows of trees whose branches swayed with the wind. To my right was a ridge, where if you’d look further down into, you’d see a gathering of roofs and moving creatures: the birds eye view of a village going about its morning activities.

I have come to a part where the sunshine divides the path in half, the left side under the shadows casted by the trees, and the right side brightly lit by the sun. As I slowly strolled around, I stumbled upon a flower: young and attractive. The earliness of the morning has not wiped away the dewdrops on its bright-yellow cheeks, nor did it stop the scent of it from perfuming the air. There were a number of them but this one seemed to tinge the most; I’d say, around three hours old.

Fall would be giving way to winter soon. I was staring at a last minute blooming beauty.
But nevertheless…
Never too late.


Responses

  1. To your right was a ridge…

  2. this is good. i can see potential. i like how you started this piece. powerful first sentence:”The morning chill has defeated the purpose of my yellow sweater, I haven’t even broken a sweat.”
    by the way, our official blog is http://www.cw101.wordpress.com. go there to click on the links and read your classmates’ works. you are encouraged, if not forced, to comment. enjoy

  3. and yes.. the lovely flower.. hahaha
    very common image yet you made it appear extraordinary to the readers..
    keep up bro!

  4. too cliche…
    i knew it right from the very start.

  5. I found the content largely more interesting than the actual title.. nice.
    *imagining fall and winter*…. oh.. but this is cool.. you’ve given me a glimpse of the two seasons we’ll never have.. waaa….

  6. here


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